Nightingale Updates Her Resume

[DerailAmnesty.com]

Originally Posted by Jeanfromfillmore

Who ever wrote that sure didn't know what they were doing. They only exposed her lack of experience for the position.

Be serious. Are you really the person best suited to be making that observation?

Actually, it's pretty good. You work with what you've got. Her history is whatever it is and the individual who cranked this out accentuated where she achieved and competently glossed over where her resume isn't strong.

This passage also flows pretty well from one set of events to the next.

As I seem to recall, for whatever reason, I think she told me she attended U Dub. I have noticed, however, that nowhere has it been stated that she graduated or holds a B.A.

[Ayatollahgondola]

Originally Posted by DerailAmnesty.com

Be serious. Are you really the person best suited to be making that observation?.

Who isn't suited for it? It shows that her background is not geared to management, politics, or finance. It also shows that Chelene doesn't stick with things very long. She went from farmhand(I doubt this one really), to artist, to model, to stage, to producing(I really doubt this one), to heating and air repair.

[DerailAmnesty.com]

Originally Posted by Ayatollahgondola

Who isn't suited for it? It shows that her background is not geared to management, politics, or finance. It also shows that Chelene doesn't stick with things very long. She went from farmhand(I doubt this one really), to artist, to model, to stage, to producing(I really doubt this one), to heating and air repair.

Jean isn't suited for it. I'm sorry, was what I wrote somehow vague or otherwise imprecise?

Davi, look at what you've got if you're writing a resume/background piece intended to display Chelene favorably. What would you have done differently than the author of that piece?

[Ayatollahgondola]

Originally Posted by DerailAmnesty.com

Jean isn't suited for it. I'm sorry, was what I wrote somehow vague or otherwise imprecise?

It was unnecessary

If Chelene were running for a position on "survivor", that would be a good resume. Tendering that one for an executive position was as foolish as those who might rely on it as a basis to vote for her.

[DerailAmnesty.com]

Unnecessary, maybe. Accurate, without a doubt. Vague as to whom it referred? Not by any stretch of the imagination.

You didn't answer the question, however. You said you don't like what the author wrote. How would you change it?

[Jeanfromfillmore]

In answer to your question Sam, yes I am one of the best suited to make that observation. You just can't take the fact that I won't put up with your bullying crap. You know so little about me, yet you spew it as though you're doing my biography.

[Ayatollahgondola]

Originally Posted by DerailAmnesty.com

Unnecessary, maybe. Accurate, without a doubt. Vague as to whom it referred? Not by any stretch of the imagination.

You didn't answer the question, however. You said you don't like what the author wrote. How would you change it?

You cannot be serious....
You want me to write something for Chelena or her crew to pick up and run with? The only thing I'd offer to help her write is her confession

[DerailAmnesty.com]

Originally Posted by Ayatollahgondola

You cannot be serious....
You want me to write something for Chelena or her crew to pick up and run with? The only thing I'd offer to help her write is her confession

I don't want you to write anything. I want you to tell me how it could be improved. You said you don't like it. OK, so what could fix it?

Davi, you can't polish a turd. The author of that piece has to write about Chelene. That's the topic. That passage is not bad at all. It makes her sound All-American, family-oriented and portrays her as having a variety of experiences.

It highlights and polishes the good, and ignores or minimizes the bad.

Unfortunately, discovering the cure to cancer, possessing a towering intellect, building a financial empire or leading the life of an admirable role model aren't on the menu. That's not the author's fault, though.